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Positive support and intervention

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Positive support and intervention for persons with a developmental or intellectual disability refers to: adding events, reinforcements, activities to the environment, and interactions, promoting the development and maintenance of functional behavior serving to bring the individual natural positive rewards, and allowing the individual to escape from and avoid situations that bring internal distress and discomfort (Griffiths, Gardner & Nugent, 1998). By understanding the nature of the syndrome, the caregiver can develop environments and interactions that will bring the individual greater natural rewards and eliminate situations that may predictably cause distress.

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Positive support and intervention for persons with a developmental or intellectual disability refers to: adding events, reinforcements, activities to the environment, and interactions, promoting the development and maintenance of functional behavior serving to bring the individual natural positive rewards, and allowing the individual to escape from and avoid situations that bring internal distress and discomfort (Griffiths, Gardner & Nugent, 1998). (Griffiths, Gardner, & Nugent, 1998). [APA calls for a series comma generally, and always within references.] By understanding the nature of the syndrome, the caregiver can develop environments and interactions that will bring the individual greater natural rewards and eliminate situations that may predictably cause distress.

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Positive support and intervention for persons with a developmental or intellectual disability refers to: adding events, reinforcements, activities to the environment, and interactions, promoting the development and maintenance of functional behavior serving to bring the individual natural positive rewards, and allowing the individual to escape from and avoid situations that bring internal distress and discomfort (Griffiths, Gardner, & Nugent, 1998). By understanding the nature of the syndrome, the caregiver can develop environments and interactions that will bring the individual greater natural rewards and eliminate situations that may predictably cause distress.