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References American Academy of Pediatrics. (2001). Health supervision for children with Down syndrome. Pediatrics, 107, 442-449. Burt, D. B., Loveland, K. A., &blockquote> Lewis, K. R. (1992). Depression and the onset of dementia in adults with mental retardation. American Journal on Mental Retardation, 96, 502-511. Cohen, W. I. (1999, Sept.). Health care guidelines for individuals with Down syndrome. Down Syndrome Quarterly, 4. Davies, M., Udwin,O., & Howlin, P. (1998). Adults with Williams syndrome. British Journal of Psychiatry, 172, 273-276.… Kaufman, A. S. & Kaufman, N. L. (1984). Kaufman Assessment Battery for Children. Circle Pines, MN: American Guidance Service. Lund, J. (1988) Psychiatric aspects of down's Syndrome. Acta psychiatrica Scandinavica, 178, 369-374. Morris, C. A., Leonard, C. O., Dilts, C., & Demsey, S. A. (1990). Adults with Williams syndrome. American Journal of Medical Genetics, 6(Suppl), 102-107. Murray, N. & Cohen, W. When your baby has Down Syndrome. Pittsburg, PA: The Down syndrome Center, Children's Hospital of Pittsburg. Nowaczyk, M. J. M., Whelan, D. T, & Hill, R. E. (1998). Smith-Lemli-Opitz syndrome: Pynotypic extreme with minimal clinical findings. American Journal of Medical Genetics, 78, 419-423. Pary, R. J. (1993). Psychiatric disorders in adults with Down syndrome. Habilitative Mental Health Newsletter, 12, 26-27. Pary, R. J. (1994). Obsessional slowness. Habilitative Mental Health Newsletter, 13, 49-50. Pary, R. J., Strauss, D. J., & White, J. F. (1996). A population survey of bipolar disorder in persons with and without Down syndrome. Down Syndrome Quarterly, 1 (3), 1-4. Pary, R. J., Friedlander, R., & Capone, G. T. (1999). Bipolar disorder and Down syndrome: Six cases. Mental Health Aspects of Developmental Disabilities, 2, 59-63. Peterson, B. S. (1996). Considerations of natural history and pathophysiology in the psychopharmacology of tourette's syndrome. Journal of Clinical Psychiatry, 57, 24-34.… Remington, G. & Adams, M. Risperidone and obsessive-compulsive symptoms. (1994). Journal of Clinical Psychopharmacology, 14, 358-359.… Smith, A. C. M., McGavran, L., Robinson, J., Waldstein, G., Macfarlane, J., Zonona, et al. (1996). Interstitial deletion of (17) (p.11.2) in nine patients. American Journal of Medical Genetics, 24, 421-432.… Udwin, O., & Dennis, J. (1995). Down syndrome. In G. O'Brien & W. Yule (Eds.), Behavioural Pheonotypes (pp. 105-109). Cambridge, England: MacKeith Press. Van Allen, J. I., Fung, J., & Jurenka, S. B. (1999). Health care concerns and guidelines for adults with Down syndrome. American Journal of Medical Genetics, 89, 100-110. Warren, A. C., Holroyd, S., & Folstein, M. F. (1989). Major depression in Down's syndrome. British Journal of Psychiatry, 155, 202-205.

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References American Academy of Pediatrics. (2001). Health supervision for children with Down syndrome. Pediatrics, 107, 442-449. Burt, D. B., Loveland, K. A., & Lewis, K. R. (1992). Depression and the onset of dementia in adults with mental retardation. American Journal on Mental Retardation, 96, 502-511. Cohen, W. I. (1999, Sept.). Health care guidelines for individuals with Down syndrome. Down Syndrome Quarterly, 4. Davies, M., Udwin,O., Udwin, O., [A space is needed.] & Howlin, P. (1998). Adults with Williams syndrome. British Journal of Psychiatry, 172, 273-276.… Kaufman, A. S. & Kaufman, N. L. Kaufman, A. S., & Kaufman, N. L. [A comma is needed after an author's initials and before an ampersand.] (1984). Kaufman Assessment Battery for Children. Circle Pines, MN: American Guidance Service. Lund, J. (1988) Psychiatric aspects of down's Syndrome. Down's syndrome. Acta psychiatrica Scandinavica, 178, 369-374. Morris, C. A., Leonard, C. O., Dilts, C., & Demsey, S. A. (1990). Adults with Williams syndrome. American Journal of Medical Genetics, 6(Suppl), 6 (Suppl), [A space is needed.] 102-107. Murray, N. & Murray, N., [A comma is needed after an author's initials and before an ampersand.] & Cohen, W. [We need a year here.] When your baby has Down Syndrome. Down syndrome. Pittsburg, PA: Pittsburgh, PA: The Down syndrome Center, Children's Hospital of Pittsburg. Pittsburgh. Nowaczyk, M. J. M., Whelan, D. T, & Whelan, D. T., & Hill, R. E. (1998). Smith-Lemli-Opitz syndrome: Pynotypic extreme with minimal clinical findings. American Journal of Medical Genetics, 78, 419-423. Pary, R. J. (1993). Psychiatric disorders in adults with Down syndrome. Habilitative Mental Health Newsletter, 12, 26-27. Habilitative Mental Health Newsletter, 12, 26-27. Pary, R. J. (1994). Obsessional slowness. Habilitative Mental Health Newsletter, 13, 49-50. Habilitative Mental Health Newsletter, 13, 49-50. Pary, R. J., Strauss, D. J., & White, J. F. (1996). A population survey of bipolar disorder in persons with and without Down syndrome. Down Syndrome Quarterly, 1 (3), 1-4. [This one was out of order.] Pary, R. J., Friedlander, R., & Capone, G. T. (1999). Bipolar disorder and Down syndrome: Six cases. Mental Health Aspects of Developmental Disabilities, 2, 59-63. Pary, R. J., Strauss, D. J., & White, J. F. (1996). A population survey of bipolar disorder in persons with and without Down syndrome. Down Syndrome Quarterly, 1 (3), 1-4. Peterson, B. S. (1996). Considerations of natural history and pathophysiology in the psychopharmacology of tourette's syndrome. Tourette's syndrome. Journal of Clinical Psychiatry, 57, 24-34. ["Tourette's" is a proper noun and must always be capitalized, even when the sentence style is called for in article titles.]… Remington, G. & Adams, M. Risperidone and obsessive-compulsive symptoms. (1994). Journal Adams, M. (1994). Risperidone and obsessive-compulsive symptoms. Journal of Clinical Psychopharmacology, 14, 358-359. [The year comes between the authors and the title.]… Smith, A. C. M., McGavran, L., Robinson, J., Waldstein, G., Macfarlane, J., Zonona, et al. (1996). [We need an initial for Zonona's given name.] Interstitial deletion of (17) (p.11.2) in nine patients. American Journal of Medical Genetics, 24, 421-432.… Udwin, O., & Dennis, J. (1995). Down syndrome. In G. O'Brien & W. Yule (Eds.), Behavioural Pheonotypes (pp. 105-109). Cambridge, England: MacKeith Press. Van Allen, J. I., Fung, J., & Jurenka, S. B. (1999). Health care concerns and guidelines for adults with Down syndrome. American Journal of Medical Genetics, 89, 100-110. Warren, A. C., Holroyd, S., & Folstein, M. F. (1989). Major depression in Down's syndrome. British Journal of Psychiatry, 155, 202-205.

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References American Academy of Pediatrics. (2001). Health supervision for children with Down syndrome. Pediatrics, 107, 442-449. Burt, D. B., Loveland, K. A., & Lewis, K. R. (1992). Depression and the onset of dementia in adults with mental retardation. American Journal on Mental Retardation, 96, 502-511. Cohen, W. I. (1999, Sept.). Health care guidelines for individuals with Down syndrome. Down Syndrome Quarterly, 4. Davies, M., Udwin, O., & Howlin, P. (1998). Adults with Williams syndrome. British Journal of Psychiatry, 172, 273-276.… Kaufman, A. S., & Kaufman, N. L. (1984). Kaufman Assessment Battery for Children. Circle Pines, MN: American Guidance Service. Lund, J. (1988) Psychiatric aspects of Down's syndrome. Acta psychiatrica Scandinavica, 178, 369-374. Morris, C. A., Leonard, C. O., Dilts, C., & Demsey, S. A. (1990). Adults with Williams syndrome. American Journal of Medical Genetics, 6 (Suppl), 102-107. Murray, N., & Cohen, W. (1996). When your baby has Down syndrome. Pittsburgh, PA: The Down syndrome Center, Children's Hospital of Pittsburgh. Nowaczyk, M. J. M., Whelan, D. T., & Hill, R. E. (1998). Smith-Lemli-Opitz syndrome: Pynotypic extreme with minimal clinical findings. American Journal of Medical Genetics, 78, 419-423. Pary, R. J. (1993). Psychiatric disorders in adults with Down syndrome. Habilitative Mental Health Newsletter, 12, 26-27. Pary, R. J. (1994). Obsessional slowness. Habilitative Mental Health Newsletter, 13, 49-50. Pary, R. J., Friedlander, R., & Capone, G. T. (1999). Bipolar disorder and Down syndrome: Six cases. Mental Health Aspects of Developmental Disabilities, 2, 59-63. Pary, R. J., Strauss, D. J., & White, J. F. (1996). A population survey of bipolar disorder in persons with and without Down syndrome. Down Syndrome Quarterly, 1 (3), 1-4. Peterson, B. S. (1996). Considerations of natural history and pathophysiology in the psychopharmacology of Tourette's syndrome. Journal of Clinical Psychiatry, 57, 24-34.… Remington, G. & Adams, M. (1994). Risperidone and obsessive-compulsive symptoms. Journal of Clinical Psychopharmacology, 14, 358-359.… Smith, A. C. M., McGavran, L., Robinson, J., Waldstein, G., Macfarlane, J., Zonona, J., et al. (1996). Interstitial deletion of (17) (p.11.2) in nine patients. American Journal of Medical Genetics, 24, 421-432.… Udwin, O., & Dennis, J. (1995). Down syndrome. In G. O'Brien & W. Yule (Eds.), Behavioural Pheonotypes (pp. 105-109). Cambridge, England: MacKeith Press. Van Allen, J. I., Fung, J., & Jurenka, S. B. (1999). Health care concerns and guidelines for adults with Down syndrome. American Journal of Medical Genetics, 89, 100-110. Warren, A. C., Holroyd, S., & Folstein, M. F. (1989). Major depression in Down's syndrome. British Journal of Psychiatry, 155, 202-205.