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He died in obscurity

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By the time Looney was convicted of murder in 1925, his empire had already collapsed. He served time in prison, then lived out the last eight years of his life in Texas and New Mexico. He died in obscurity in remote south Texas in 1942 where he was buried in an unmarked grave.

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By the time Looney was convicted of murder in 1925, his empire had already collapsed. He served time in prison, then lived out the last eight years of his life in Texas and New Mexico. He died in obscurity in remote south Texas in 1942 where he was buried in an unmarked grave. in 1942 in an El Paso tuberculosis sanitarium, and he was buried in an unmarked grave in south Texas. [Suggested revision OK? The site John Patrick Looney reports (with its vital stats at the top) his death in remote south Texas, but when you click “Read More” at that site, we see he actually died of tuberculosis in a sanitarium in El Paso (far west Texas, not remote south Texas), but he was apparently buried where he had apparently resided in his last years, in remote south Texas (Falfurrias in Brooks County, probably around McAllen); since “BURIAL” at the site’s vital stats has “Unknown,” I guess that means that his remains could have been “in an unmarked grave”; in chapter 37, you have him buried in “Rose Lawn Cemetery in McAllen, Texas,” presumably without headstone or other marker (therefore, the grave is “unmarked”).]

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By the time Looney was convicted of murder in 1925, his empire had already collapsed. He served time in prison, then lived out the last eight years of his life in Texas and New Mexico. He died in obscurity in 1942 in an El Paso tuberculosis sanitarium, and he was buried in an unmarked grave in south Texas.