Substantive editing sample 66:
Concerning the readers of this manual

Sometimes an editor needs to make the language more direct. Addressing the reader directly is an effective way to avoid the awkward "he or she" or, much worse, "he/she."

Note: The author of this piece was not a native English speaker. She very much appreciated the heavy commentary that explained my thinking behind the many suggested revisions. The highlighted comments elucidated for her many of the subtle peculiarities of American English.

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