Substantive editing sample 73:
Making the content fit

Sometimes a writer adopts a conversational tone that is unsuited to a particular technical audience. Fixing such text often involves cutting out a lot of "deadwood" verbiage.

Note: The author of this piece was not a native English speaker. She very much appreciated the heavy commentary that explained my thinking behind the many suggested revisions. The highlighted comments elucidated for her many of the subtle peculiarities of American English.

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